Storyboard changes

Feedback from my tutor Claire 

After Claire and I discussed my two storyboards we decided to rearrange and add some things to the second one.

I had a feeling that not showing the full main character was not a good idea so we added an establishing shot of her so we can see how much of a beaten down and sad character she is  (through her clothing and body language). 

New Storyboard:

Backgrounds

I would have drawn up background on paper but with my storyboards I felt like I didn't really have anything to draw. All my backgrounds I want to be quite simple but full of grungy textures and darkness. I originally wanted to achieve this by overlaying images from Google to create new ones but I feel like that might be a bit too close to the whole copyright thing. 

I created these backgrounds with Photoshop brushes and the last few with an image from Google and brushes overlaying them. 

Version 1: Darker 

Version 2: Lighter

The peeling on the left I think is too big in comparison to the size of the character will be

Version 1: Google image with Photoshop brushes overlayed

Version 2: More textures overlayed 

I created these images slightly longer than usual video dimensions because I wanted to pan across them without having to zoom into the images. These are just mock up backgrounds.

Storyboards

I didn't use the mother character too much or most of the monster characters - I used the shadow monsters mainly as the bullies.

Storyboard 1

In the second storyboard I didn't use the mother character at all. I think having more characters distracts from the story and also the visuals so I might cut her out all together.

Final Characters: Profile and Front Views

Girl (Bullied character):

The Mother: 

I wanted the mother to remain unknown. I wanted her to be seen as materialistic but stern. I felt like the outfit and her thin frame communicate this idea.

The Monster Bullies: 

Character Development

The Bully:
I experimented with angry faces and poses but found it hard to make them look childish and basically not weird. 

I thought of having the bullies portrayed at monsters and shadows rather than human children. This will add a great visual effect and make the bullying seem more scary to the viewer.

Main girl (bullied character):

I thought I had sorted this character out quite quickly but I felt like she needed more work. She also looked too much like a character already made by Tim Burton. 

I experimented further with the character face shape.

Excuse her lack of hair. I wanted to see what hair style would suit her...

I played around with hairstyles. Influenced by typical children's hairstyles. 

Could I portray my story without humans?

Character Style Influence

Cutesy Style:

• Looks like its been drawn quickly on a tablet
• Little or no mouths
• Big eyes
• Eyes are one solid colour
• Big heads in comparison to body
• Scribbles on their cheeks to show their emotion
• Not in detail (no fingers)

Tim Burton / Tim Burton influenced Style: 

• Big eyes with little pupils - Always wide open
• Eyes have dark around them
• Huge heads
• Skinny necks
• Skinny arms and legs (like sticks)
• Little feet
• Little or wide mouths
• Very rarely smiling
• Bigger shoulders with little waists

I feel like these styles are really similar in some ways and I think they could easily merge together for a video. These styles (Tim Burtons style especially) would go really well with the theme of my rhyme and also the styles of medium I like too.